This week we were writing a made up story about a gumboot throwing competition and here is mine:
Hope you enjoy!
I am a student at Wigram Primary School. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
To support my learning I ask you to comment as follows:
1. Something positive - something you like about what I have shared.
2. Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what I had to say
3. Something thoughtful - how have you connected with my learning? Give me some ideas for next time or ask me a question.
hi amelia
ReplyDeleteI like the way you said it was burning hot as my face was sweating.
next time could you describe the gumboot.
This reminds me of rugby.
thanks for your comment Shanaya,
DeleteI think I should have described the boot so thanks for the tip!
:)
I like the way you said at the start that they were sweating because it means what you are felling and how hot it is
ReplyDeleteHAPPY B-DAY Amelia
ReplyDeleteThanks for your 2 comments Canada but next time just put the first comment in not the second comment because that isn't based on my work.
Delete:)